23. You need to to take a safety class before we can rent out power equipment to you.
24. You must present valid verification before we can process any large check for immediate payment.
25. You must complete the enclosed card, so that we can update our customer records.
26. You can pay just $139 per person for a two-night getaway package to Orlando, that includes hotel accommodations, Pleasure Island tickets, and complimentary breakfasts.
27. You must complete the enclosed questionnaire so we can schedule for summer vacations.
28. You can take a in-house training program, if you want to improve your writing skills.
29. You can only get a store credit for returned merchandise.
30. You can get a free iPod from the bookstore only if you are a student.
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16 years ago
Mark,
ReplyDeleteNice work! Although, you should consider the following for these questions:
23. Could have been worded better ex: Your safety policy forbids us from renting this power equipment to you.
25. For better "you" view replace our with your
27. You must complete the enclosed questionnaire so YOU can schedule your next summer vacation(s)
29. Please explain the whole agreement ex: store credit and no cash refunds on returned merchandise
30. TRY THIS!: You can ONLY get a free iPod from the bookstore if you are a student.
Thanks, -David